Mitsuha Manga Chapter 28: And then, it’s war

 

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Mitsuha Manga Chapter 28: And then, it’s war

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  1. I love your TL work and decided I wanted to help. I also included some notes about why the grammar is wrong for future reference, if you want me to drop it please tell me.
    Grammar notes

    Page 2
    I don’t want to take refuge {at -> in} another country
    Clippy notes: At implies present tense (the action is in the present) In has no defined tense.

    Page 3
    My shop will become a {suicidal -> suicide} bomb

    Page 4
    Teleport to an {unmanned zone -> uninhabited region}
    Clippy notes: Manned means that active work is being done for something. Uninhabited means that there is no one there. A car with only someone in the back seat is unmanned but not uninhabited.

    Page 7
    There {is -> are} not {customer -> customers}
    Clippy notes: A lack of something is always spoken in plural

    The news about the was {is -> has} already spread
    Clippy notes: Is is current tense, has is bast tense.

    Page 9:
    A number of nobles who {has -> have} the territory
    Clippy notes: Has is past tense, have is present

    Has advanced in {a-> } little time.
    Clippy notes: This is not a strict grammar error, but measurements usually don’t have articles like A and The

    Page 10:
    Facing the {lord -> lord’s} army
    Clippy notes: The lord owns the army so the ‘s is required

    Why {are -> do} the monsters, {which -> who} can’t be communicated with, {are joining -> have joined}
    Clippy notes: Can’t quite explain what is wrong here in the first part, minor tense issues in the second part

    Page 17:
    No you can’t hug me, even {->if} we are out in public

    Page 18:
    {As the → for} information gathering and {->to act as [a/the]} liaison
    Clippy notes: Information gathering is an activity and should not have A or The attached to it

    Localization notes:
    Feel free to ignore these, these are changes that I think would make the work read better but are still grammatically correct statements on their own. These are soley my opinion.

    Page 7:
    and I {got->received} some shocking information

    Page 10:
    I have sent {words -> messages} to various places

    {I completely don’t understand} -> {I dont understand at all}

    page 11:
    Isn’t this {chess → check} mate

    page 12
    Alright, I {-> have} decided

    page 14:
    Has given {the order -> orders} to let you pass

    page 18
    I {come -> came} to report

    Finally because I am the worst sort of person:

    The draft without {edit -> editing}, proof {read -> reading} or quality {check -> checking}
    Until it {get -> gets} fixed by the kind soul reader who {-> is} willing to help me to fix it.
    For {god -> god’s} sake
    There is a few tense issues, but you are getting way better

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    • To tell the truth, people have always demanded Local English, but I have no idea how to do it.
      The best I can do learn from my grammar mistakes, that Sir Guest_Edit pointed out for me.

      If you could help me fix the grammar to Local English, I might gradually get used to it and improve my English Ability.

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      • I will try to help with this. Although I don’t think I will be able to provide much explanation of why localization changes are useful

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  2. suggestion:
    page 3:
    when worse comes to worst, my shop will be a “{suicidal}->{suicide} bomb” (just be consistent)
    “suicide bomb” what…

    page 4:
    even {}->{though} i said suicide bomb, i didn’t plan to commit suicide.

    page 17:
    no, you can’t hug me even {}->{if} we aren’t in the public.

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  3. Second pass
    Grammar notes:
    Page 11:
    slower than {The}->{A} coach
    Clippy notes: Comparing to an abstract coach note a specific one

    There are some other (very minor) localisation issues, but it would require a better writer than me and a bunch of work to fix them, sorry.

    Other that that its good.

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